The unity of the descriptive composition of the third semester students of the English Department of Widya Mandala Catholic University Surabaya - Widya Mandala Catholic University Surabaya Repository

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APPENDIXI
S T T I D E N T S ' F I N A LT E S T ( W R T T I N G I I )
UJIAN AKHIR SEMESTER
G A S A L T A H U NK U L I A H 1 9 9 7 / 1 9 9 8

W R I T I N GI i
Rabu, 07 Januari 1998.
10 0 m e n it
III (tiga) S-t/e,B,C,D,E,F
A. Dra. Agnes Santi Widiati,M.Pd,
B.'Dr. Wuri Soedjatmiko
C. Drs. B. Budiyono, M.Pd.
D, Dra. Siti Mina Tamah
E. Drs. Y.G. Harto Pramono, M.Pd.
F . R o s a l i n a N u g r a h e n i V ,. fP . , S . P d .
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D r . A g u s t i n u s N g a d 'm

Mata Ujian

Hari, tanggal
Waktu
Smt.,/Jenjang Program
O o s e n P e n g u ji

P E R H A ITA N:
SETIAP BENTUKKECURANGAY
N A N G D I L A K U K A N i ' { A H A S I S W AP A D A S A A T U J I A N
Y A N G D I S E L E N G G A R A K AMNE R U P A K A T
NI N D A K A NY A N G S A N G A TM E N C E I J A R K A N
N A M AB I T I K F A K U L T A S , J U R U S A N ,O A N O I R I S E N O I R I l

Choose one of the fol'l owing tasks. Develop your descriptive
to inc'lude introduction,
b o d y a n d c o n c ' lu s i o n .
You may use your own dictionaries.
Task l:

Describe
the

our

campus'l ife.

Tho description

academic aspect and the

The acadernic aspect
given,

is

how textbooks

horv courses are

with

are se'lected,

s h o u ' ld i n c ' l u d e

iona'l aspect.

interact

concirned

essay

how assignments are

l ints
a n d w h a t c o m p ' li m e n t s a n d c o m p ' a
aspect is a'lso concerned with the teach-

graded and returned
are made. This

and students'

ers'
deals

rvith

three

presence.
types

of

The interactional

and teacher-teacher.

hcyr interaction

takes

the

classrooms,

student-student,

interaction:

student-teacher

p'lace in the

when interaction

aspect

It

a ' ls o d e a l s t v i t h

classrooms

takes

place

and outside
and whether

motivates or discourages the teaciting
interaction
s h o u ' ld a ' l s o i n c l u d e
process. Thb description
and learning
'l
what prograrri you sriggest to improve our campus i f e and
vrhat steps to be taken to carry out that program'

this

Describe the
'l csfetaria.
at widya Mandaa
Task 2: you are sitting
landscape around the cafetaria and describe how the
stuctents can order the meals'

APPENDIX2
CIOMPOSITIONS
SA]VIPLIOF STT]DENTS'

A Cafetaria
at WidyaMandala
The cafetariais looksout. It is aroundby smallgarden,a field, a
parkinglot andsomeof rooms.The cafetariais consistmorethanftfty
people.In the left of the cafetaria,thereis a field and a smallgarden.
The field is aroundby wire. We can play tennis,basketball
andvolley

ball.Nearthe field,thereis a smallgardenfutl rvithgreencolor.A soft
greengrassaroundthe flowersandthe trees.In the backof thatandthc
thereis onekinda largeroomlookslike a auditorium,
cafetaria,
consisl
by fifty peopleor morethansi>cty
people.Behindthis, thereis four
smallroomusedfor university
activity.Someof thclongchair,madeof
rvood,in thefiontof thisroonr.Wecansit therelor a joke,cat,or doing
like a examplelearnthe lcssonif rvegeta freetime,or no
something
more classes.in the right of the cafetaria,thereis a parkinglot tbr
motorcycle.
lt is preventionby peoplervhotrustedfrom universityand
in thefrontofthat,thereis a parkingarealor thecar.
This cafetariaalrvayscrorvdedexpectthe holidays.We knorv
cafetariais the numberone placefor studentsthat meansis a favorite
piace for them. Sometimes,they felt more happy to standin the
Althoughthey comc to

morethanstayedin the classroom.
cafetaria
cafetaria
not to eator dnnk or ordcrsomemeais,theystill havea fun
or
together,
with theirfriends.
Theycantalkingto eachothcr,studying
activity.But someol'thern,il'thcy reallyhungry,thcy
doingany4hing
canordermealsby go to the shop,paythatand thenthcy cansit in the
rvill
Thervaiteror thcrvaitress
chairfor a minuteto waitingtheirmeals.
takethemealsfor them.
Finally, lve can see horv the cafctariaat Widya Mandala
rvarmandfull of
is enoughbig,comfortable,
The cafetaria
Universiry.

vierv. We can eat any kind of food. There isn't much differences
The food is delicious.
and the cafetaria.
a small restaurant
betrveen
to
come
here
eatthe lcod.Thecost
people
from
other
school
Sometimes
Peoplefromanylevelcanbought
is not expensive
but a littlecheaper.
it.(D9)

As usual,manystudentsof Widya Mandalaspendtheir resttime or

their sparetime at cafetaria.Althoughthe weatheris ratherhot, it seems
I don'tknowexactlyifI like it or not to be there.
enjoyable.
a ratherbig park in front of cafetariawith fulled by
clearly
I see
courtthere.We can
Thereis alsothebasketball
somebeautifulflorvers.
sit in everychairswhereverwe want.MaybeI think it is very enjoyable
sitting there togetherwith our friends.Every cafe maketheir cafesas
beautifulasthey cando. Theymaketheir cafe ftrll of interestingcolors,
shape,and somekind of their foot price.Thereare manykinds of food
soldthere.And I believetheyareverydelicious.Someoftelephonebox
are standingtoo betweenthe park and the chairs.I often seethereare
usethemon theresttime.Thereis onecafeI like very
manyof students
that cafeis arranged
.u.h. It is placedin the middle.I like it because
like a bar,Althoughthat cafeis look luxurious'but the food is not too
It'youlvant to orderthe meals,first of all you cometo the
expensive.
certain cafe that you like. After that, you can order the meal while
seeingthe menuthat is hangedor attachedto the wall. You canalsosee
the price of the mealstoo there.Then,you can wait your meal or you
canaskthe servantto bringthemfor you on your sit. Finaliy, after you
enjoyyour meal,you mustpaythemin thatcertaincafe.
I think it is my descriptionaboutWidyaMandalaCafetaria.If I can
say it is very enjoyableto spendyour sparetime and your rest time
there.J everenterthe othercafein s1he1rrnivsl5itybut I realiy believe
that it is very different with Widya MandalaCafetaria.Sometimes,I
preparemy lectureat cafetariawhile enjoythe meal or the breakfastin
the morning.My friends andI often talking aboutsomethingat cafetaria
too. So, I think manyactivitiesthat is donetherefrom the simplething
untii the difficult thing.( D 5 )

I am a studentof WidyaMandalaUniversity.I spendfive daysin
a weekin my campus.Our campuslife is goodandI enjoyits situation.
There are two aspectsin our campuslife, it is academicaspectand
aspect.
interactional
In academicaspect,the coursesare given usuallyso, we haveno
havea lot of kinds,suchas makea summary,
time to piay.Thecourses
to look for article,writing, andso on. The textbooksareseiectedby the
The
iecturer. It is seiecteddepend on the students' necessaries.
assignmentare gradedfair and sometimesif we get a bad marh the
lecturerwill makean examinationagainto improve our mark. In our
campusthe presencedisciplineenough.We have twenty five percents
absentfor one credit.I think this is enoughfor us. If finally you take
morethantwenfyfive percents,we shouidreportto administration
On the other hand, the interactionalaspecthave three rypesof
interactionFirst,student- student.Betweenstudent,thereis a good
interaction.Maybe becauseof we have a different environmentwith
They
high schoolso, we help eachother.Secondis student- teacher.
havea goodinteractiontoo. EngiishDeparsncnthasnot much student
so, the teacherknow the studentand the studentknow themtoo. Also
becauseof the Widya Mandalais a CatholicUniversiryso, thereis
familiar interaction.Third, teacher- teacherinteractionis good too.
Theyhavethe samework so theymustcooperationandhelpeachother.
The interactionthat happenmakeus braveandthe situationmotivateus
systemso,we
to standat attitude.Due to we ar€taughtwith teachership
havea skili to teaching.
Engiish
Finally, I want to suggestto improveEnglishDepartment.
Departmentis good enough but its studentsdoesn't use the English
itsilf as it oughtto be. The stepto be takento carryout this probiemis
whenyou taketheclassuntil you finishyourclass
useEnglishianguage
so, it canimproveyourEnglish.( D 6 )

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parkinglot and someof rooms.The cafetariais consistmore than fifty
people.In the left of the cafetari4 thereis a field and a small garden.
The field is aroundby wire. We can play tennis,basketballandvolley
ball.Nearthe field,thereis a smallgardenfull with greencolor.A soft
greengrassaroundthe flowersandthetrees.In the backofthat andthe
cafetaia,thereis onekind a largeroomlooks like a auditorium,consist
by fifty peopleor morethan sixty people.Behindthis, thereis four
smallroomusedforuniversityactivity.Someof thelongchair,madeof
rvood,in thefrontof thisroom.We cansit therefor a joke,eat,or doing
like a examplelearnthe lessonif we get a free time,or no
something
more classes.In the right of the cafetaria,there is a parking lot for
by peoplewho trustedfrom universityand
It is prevention
motorcycle.
in thefrontofthat,thereis a parkingareafor thecar.
This cafetariaalways crowded expect the holidays. We know
cafetariais the numberone placefor studentsthat meansis a favorite
they felt more happy to stand in the
place for them. Sometimes,
cafetariamore than stayedin the classroom.Although they come to
cafetarianot to eat or drink or ordersomemeals,theystill havea fun
or
wrth their fnends.Theycantalkinglo eachother,studyingtogether,
doinganythingactivity.But someof them,if they reallyhungry,they
canordermealsby go to the shop,paythat andthentheycansit in the
chairfor a minuteto waitingtheir meals.The waiteror the waitresswill
takethemeaisfor them.
Finally, we can see horv the cafetariaat Widya Mandala
University.The cafetariais enoughbig, comfortabie,warm and full of
vierv. We can eat any kind of food. There isn'l much differences
and the cafetaria-The food is delicious.
betweena small restaurant
peoplefromotherschoolcomehereto eatthefood.Thecost
Sometimes
Peoplefrom any level canbought
but a little cheaper.
is not expensive
it.(De)

of Teachingand Learningat Widya MandalaUniversity
Process
is gratefulthing
The processof teachingandlearningat WidyaMandalaUniversity
the
would be a gratefulandcompietelything.It is all right to explainhow
uraJ"rni" asiect andthe inteiactionalaspectinvolvedin. This is especially
step
Uy i""tut.t and studentsu'hen they deal with the matter step by
everyday.
f irsr of all, somelecturerswho get severalschedulefrom the Head
will be
of English Department,they preparetogethertextbook that
the class,
teachiig for eachclass.Llatedt; their own duty.Beforeenterto
they
,
- bring with thema students'presence.
f[en" entering to the ciass, the lecturer would do everyhing
introducethe studentsby managingclasslowards a
successfully.They
-between
teacherandthe students'Gradually'the lecturer
lood relationship
abouttexlbooksor material papers
iiu, ,orn" compiimentsor explanation
rule of
which must be followed uy att tne students.This is delaberately
academicas importantitems,andall the text bookshavebeenselected'
Afterwirds, the lecfurerinstructsall the studentsto comprehend
ln a few
textbook. The studentstake a lot of time to get some idea'
lt ls
polnt'
on
minutes,the lecturerexplainsthecontentofthe bookbased
easily'And the studentsdon't
;d;;"hy for half studentsnot too satisfied
for some
**t o be calm passive.The lecturerprepareshis / her time
to do
questions,or somecomplaints.He / shealsogive someassignments
and finishing
the lectureralwaysorderto themdoingassignment
;ilklt
The students
tL- on time. The lectureismakedisciplineto the students'
arenot allowedto do it postphonely'
inside
When someof sitoA"ntshave questionapartfrom the course
askmoreaboutit'
the class,much time is preparedfor the studentsto
Althouglr"thereare*uoyfr"".do*ofthestudents,theyhavetokeeptheir
Because,however,lecturersce*arnly have a.sPecialprivacy'
;i;;;;t;.
havestrong
iy rf,. ti.", the stuientsat WidyaMandalaUniversity either
oi not that area groupof goodpeople'mainlyasstudents'
motivated
--of
My positioni" iirlr"*riting is a siud"nt is interestedin process
programin'it. All of the programare very complicated'!"i:':l:^
tne
rmproveild
l*! to be applied' There are much more opportunity-to
:
steps
following
beperformedin
;;&;-fft" f*"i'on Englishfaculty'It can
as
EnglishDepartmentnt""ttury hold somequiz or games'such
u.
scrable,a Puzzledcard.
competltlonor
b. In each semester,the English faculty can often make
of other
essay comPetition and join the English DePartment
universities.

c.Takingascholarshipforhighlevel_gradestudents.Itisvery
importantto couragethe studentsmoredeveloping'
Finally, the studentshave to realize that all thing dependon the own
students.(D19)

The cafetariaof Widya Mandala university is located in my
campus.It is contiguouswith basketballcourt and very near from the
parking area. This cafetariais constructedin the modem style and
severalplant,so therearemanypeoplelikesthe situation.
surrounded
If we are sitting at the cafetaria,we can looks many people
activitieshere.Someoneis workinghis assignmentand at the sometime,
othersareeating,goingsteady,andalsostudying.
Many choicemenuof mealand drink havebeenprovided.About
four kinds of dishesstyle, they are ltaiian, American,Indonesian,and
Chinesestyie.
mustdetermineit at first. Then,
To orderthe meals,the students
girl
directlyat the stand.Next, they
comes
the
sewice
or
they can talks to
must pay for it before eat. After severalminutesthe order have ready.
Finally,theycanieavetheirtable.(D 14)

of WidyaMandalaUniversity
TheCafetaria
Thecafetariais locatcd
WidyaMandalauniversityhasa blok of cafetaria.
right in themiddle.Thereis a motorbike parking
in thebackyardof the campus,
areaon ttt. lgnt handsideandon the left handside,thereis a basketball field'
The cafetariahas severalstandswhich are sells many things,including foods,
The sizeof eachstandsis not quitebig but is enough
andstationaries.
beverages
on our right-handside
for prelaringmealswe ordered.The standsis arranged
the cafetariafrom the classes.The long path in the middle,
rvhenwe are-entering
seperatedthe standsand the piace rvherewe are eatingour lunch. we can do
orjust havea
in the cafetariuru"h a. eatour lunch,discusssomething
"u".ytiring
smalltalk rvith our friends.
We haveto rvalkquitefar, passthe big pool anda car parkingarea'andrve
The
want to go to the cafetaria.It needsfive minutesto gettherefrom the classes.
situationin the cafetariais not goodenoughfor us;for thereis no air conditioner,
so the.spacebecomesvery hot. Even though,there is severalfans,they are not
to
work well to keepthe air fresh.It couldmakethe visitorsnot fell comfortable
enjoytheir lunch; however,the cafetariais full of peopleon the break.time.It is
U"caus"thereis no otherscafetarianearto choosewhenwe needto eatlunch The
spaceof the cafetariais quite big for the studentsof Widya MandalaUniversity
and clean enoughto, *r can enjoy our lunch there without disturbedby bad
looking of waste.
The standssell many kinds of food suchas nasi rawon,nasl soto,gadoalso havemany
gado,pangsitmie, satebumbukecapand so on. The beverages
ia.iety ruJh u, soft drink,juice, min}al waterand etc.Thereis a lot of peoplein
the caietariawhenbreaktime comes.Becauseof the limited stands,they haveto
quequefor orderingthe meals.We haveto pay cashfor the meals'After, we had
oraei o* lunch,thJ waitresswill serveusandtakeour lunchto our tabie.We can
pay beforeor after the food we orderedhas served.Usuallythe waitresslooks
tonfirsedwhen shetakesthe lunch or food to our table,becausethereare many
peopleon the people and she doesn't recognizethe visitors one by one' The
iewice of the waitressis good enough.They seempatientand give attentionto
our order,
in my opinion,the cafetariaof widya MandalaUniversityis good.And
the serviceis goingwell day by day.The thing shouldbe changedis the location
of the cafetaria,becauseit is too far from the classesand we havejust fifteen
minutesto eat our lunch.It is not enoughtime, becausewe alwaysin a hurry for
the next or beinglate;for the queuein cafetariais too long.

APPENDIX 3
ANALYSIS MODEL

The Analysis of Unity in the Paragraph

writer made an
To analyze the unity of the paragraphsunder study' the
saw the relationshiP
outline of each paragraph, identified the topic sentence and
This is exemPlified
between the topic sentence and its supportiog sentences'
below.
a favorite place
TS : cafetariais the number oneplacefor studentsthat means
for them.
SSI : The cafetariais alwayscrowdedexceptthe holidays'
they felt morehappy to standin the cafetariamorethanstayed
SS2: Sometimes,
in the classroom.
S S 3 : Al t h o u g h th e yco me to ca fe tatianottoeatanddr inkor or der somemeals'
they still havea fun with their friends'
or doing anything
SS4: They can talking to each other, studying together,
activitY.
order meals' drink '
SS5: But someof thenqif they arereallyhungry,they can
andeats.
then they cansit inthe
556 : They ordermealsbygo tothe shop, pay that and
chair for a minuteto waiting their meals'
SS7: Thewaiteror the waitresswill takethe mealsfor them'

(De)

Fromthe outlineof one paragraphof ( D 9 ), we know that the paragraph
is developedwell. Each supportingsentencesupportsthe topic sentenceof the
paragraph.In other words, the paragraphis unified. Another outline of a
below.
paragraphis presented
TS : The studentsorderfoodsanddrinksin the oneofcafd in the cafetaria.
SSI: They are likeanant when they order thefood anddrink becausethey
areso noisy.
SS2: It is easyto orderthefoodsanddrinksin the cafetaria.
SS3: We just order the drink in the oneof cafeand we paidit thenwe wait for
a minute after that we have our food and drink, but sometimesif the
cafetoo busy or noisy , we must wait for ten or fifteen minutesfor our
food anddrink.
SS4: Therearesomanyvarietiesof food anddrink.
SS5: Therearesix cafes,two foto copiesplaces,oneplacefor koperasi,andone
placefor church'sthiog or staff.

(D2r)
The paragraphaboveis disunifiedas the fourth and the fifth supporting
sentercesarenot relatedto the topic sentence.

The Analysisof Unity in the WholeComposition
by several
ThS : Thecafetariais constructedin the modemsfyleandsurrounded
plant,sotherearemanypeoplelikesthe situation.
TSI : If we aresittingat the cafetaria,we canlook manypeopleactivitiesthere.
( unified)
TS2 : Many choicemenuof mealanddrink havebeenprovided.( unified)
TS3 : ( implied)Theway to orderthe meal.( disunified)
(D 14)
The compositionabove is disunified since each topic sentencedon't
supportsthe thesisstatementas the centralidea of the composition.In additioq
one of the paragraphs( paragraph4 ) is disunified.The following is another
outlineof a compositionunderstudy.
ThS : There are two aspectsin our campuslife ; academicaspectand
interactionalaspect.

T S r : ( implied) Thedescriptionof the academicaspect( disunified)
T52 : Theinteractionalaspecthavethreetypesofinteraction( disunified)
( unified)
TS3 : Suggestion
(D6)
supports
Ifwe analyzethe outlineabove,we knowthat eachtopic sentence
the thesisstatementof the composition.However,this compositionis disunified
ofit aredisunifed.
sincetwo paragraphs