Politeknik Negeri Nusa Utara
Review Introduction
Talent Scouting untuk PTN Baru dan Universitas di Wilayah
Indonesia Timur
Politeknik Negeri Nusa Utara
Tahuna, Sangihe, Sulawesi Utara
10-12 Oktober 2016
Review Intro-1:
Frets J. Rieuwpassa (Prodi: Pengolahan hasil
perikanan)
• Judul:
• Karakterisasi Sifat Fungsional Bioaktif-Peptida dari Teripang Hasil Ekstraksi Menggunakan Teknologi
Membran Ultrafltrasi (Characteristic of Functional Properties of Bioactif-Peptide From Sea Cucumber
Extration Using Membran Ultrafltration Technology)
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo
• Hindari penggunaan istilah yang sama berulang-ulang. Kita dapat menggunakan istilah lain atau
kata pengganti yang maknanya mirip
• Sumber referensi terlalu “tua”: 1993, 1996, 2002, 2003. Gunakan referensi terkini yang relevan
sehingga peneliti terlihat memang mengikuti perkembangan penelitian bidang yang dikaji
• Kutipan: “Hasil penelitian membuktikan bahwa …” sebaiknya menggunakan sumber referensinya,
misalkan “Heru (2013) membuktikan bahwa …”
• Problem yang akan dikaji:
• Penggunaan Membran Ultrafltrasi Q: Apakah ada pendekatan lain yang dapat Anda teliti sebagai novelty?
• Karakterisasi fungsional dari ekstraksi Bioaktif-Peptida Teripang Apakah belum ada yang meneliti hal ini?
Review Intro-2:
Usy Nora Manurung (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
• Judul:
• Pemberian Ekstrak Rumput Laut pada Ikan Nila Oreochromis Nilaticus untuk
Meningkatkan Resistensi Terhadap Bakteri Aeromonas hydrophila
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo
• Key terms: Rumput Laut, Ikan Nila, Resistensi/Imunologi, Bakteri Aeromonas hydrophila
• Why?
• What the advantages? What the efect(s) of the bacteria to Nila?
• Judul kurang “menjual” (tidak menarik)
• Ada “hilang” koneksi yang menyambungkan antara ”penyakit”, “rumput laut”, dan ikan
Nila
• Apakah yang tertulis merupakan ”Introduction”, bagian dari “Metodologi”, atau kajian
peneliti lain (tetapi tidak ada referensi)?
Review Intro-3:
Gracia Ch. Tooy (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• Determinan Kinerja Tenaga Kesehatan di Puskesmas Daerah Perbatasan dan
Kepulauan
• Saran/Masukkan
• Data: Tenaga Kesehatan di Puskesmas 1 dari 4 masalah yang ada
• Lokasi: Daerah Perbatasan dan Kepulauan di Indonesia?
• Q: Apakah di negara tujuan studi ada unit kesehatan yang setara atau seluruh
data diambil di Indonesia? Berapa lama?
• Dukung dengan riset yang telah dilakukan terkait fakta-fakta masalah yang ada
• Fakta: ”85 orang D3 = 63 orang, SPK = 22 orang” sebutkan sumbernya
• Masalah menjadi “rumit” dan “kompleks” why? How to measure it?
Review Intro-4:
Jaka. F. P. Palawe (Prodi: Teknologi Pengolahan Ikan)
• Judul:
• Eksplorasi Olisakarida dari Hasil Laut sebagai Senyawa Prebiotik
• Saran/Masukkan
• Key terms: Olisakarida, Senyawa Prebiotik
• Q: Why olisakarida? What is/are the advantage(s)?
• Hindari penggunaan kata yang sama secara berulang dan kalimat yang terlalu panjang
(kalimat terakhir pada paragraf 1)
• Perhatikan struktur kalimat khususnya dalam penggunaan kalimat majemuk
• Perlu dibahas lebih rinci hasil/solusi dari penelitian sebelumnya
• Belum terlihat masalah apa yang terjadi dalam penelitian dan solusi apa yang akan
ditawarkan (termasuk hipotesis Anda).
• Dalam tulisan hanya disampaikan manfaat prebiotik Oligosakarida, namun tidak
disampaikan apa yang Anda ingin teliti terkait “Eksplorasi”-nya?
Review Intro-5:
Stenly C. Takarendehang (Prodi: Teknologi
Informatika)
• Judul:
• Information Technology Infrastructure Security Standard in Rural Archipelago Territorial Area
• Saran/Masukkan
• Key terms: IT Infrastructure, Security, Rural Area
• Q: Why security aspect(s) in IT infrastructure so important? Why rural? Is it diferent from other
type of area?
• In statement: “Cost are cheap, No security standard, etc.” Need: Facts or prior research result(s)
• What kind of security standard should we be implemented? references: research or experience?
• Avoid this kind of sentence: “I already read research about security issues from Mr. X.”
• Avoid ego-centric pronoun
• Is the security awareness in government institution related to “rural area”?
• Why don’t you ofer such kind of “design, architecture, or protocol of security
mechanism/standard” instead of “just ofering a security standard”?
Review Intro-6:
Stendy B. Sakur (Prodi: Teknik Informatika)
• Judul:
• Acceleration classify data signal EEG using graphics processing unit (GPU)
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo and improve your ”English” writings, but it is good start you wrote it in English (:
Organize your sentence
• Key terms: EEG, GPU
• Q: Why we need acceleration? How to classify EEG? Why do you need GPU?
• You don’t need to write explicitly on the title, just write it in the body of your article as a tool
Intro, Scope, or Methodology
• EEG signal or signal EEG? What do you think? (-;
• You need to “state” solutions of prior research on similar topics. What problem would you want
to solve?
• What problem would you want to solve? EEG with statistical, numerical, GPU, or …? NOT
CLEAR
Review Intro-7:
Chatrina M. A. Bajak (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• Evaluation of Clinical Education Environment Related (to?) Learning
Experience: To develop more Efective Learning in Clinical Settings
• Saran/Masukkan
• Evaluation vs. Efective?
• Why CEERLE is so important?
• Note some prior research results on the introduction: problem
solution, limitation, methods, etc.
• Improve your “English” writing
Review Intro-8:
Edwin O. Langi (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
• Judul:
• Growth Analysis of Commercial Sea Cucumber Post Mutilation
• Saran/Masukkan
• Pair: “either … or …”; “neither … nor …”
• What problem do you want to solve?
• The idea is not clearly stated.
• What is the relation between: Commercial, Sea Cucumber, and (Post)
Mutilation
Review Intro-9:
Meistvin Welembuntu (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• Peer to Peer Mentoring Program
• Saran/Masukkan
• (Study, Design) on Peer to Peer Mentoring Program
• Use variation of terms or similar meaning of terms, not always use the
same.
• Hypothesis: one of solution is “peer mentoring program”
• 1-group (which is applying peer mentoring program) vs. control group
(which is applying traditional model)?
• Give your attention on Grammar and Structure
• How about your research theme? Qualitative vs. Quantitative Research?
Review Intro-10:
Stevy Imelda M. Wodi (Prodi: Mikrobiologi Pengolahan
Hasil Perikanan)
• Judul:
• Studies on The Structural Changes of Myoglobin and Identifcation of Bacteria
Produced Histamine in Big Eye Tuna (Thunnus obesus)
• Saran/Masukkan
• “Bigeye Tuna (plural?) are important fsh species …” How important is it?
• ”Mioglobin was water soluble protein that found in liquid muscle cell was changed to
brown” How many sentence(s)? 1, 2, 3, or more?
• How about:
• “Mioglobin is water soluble protein founded in liquid muscle cell. It was changed to brown”
• “Mioglobin, water soluble protein founded in liquid muscle cell, was changed to brown”
• “Mioglobin which is water soluble founded in liquid muscle cell was changed to brown”
• Improve your structure
• Give your attention to your (main) research problems?
Review Intro-11:
Desmianti Babo (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
• Judul:
• Nitrogen Fixation and Protein Formation by Azolla Cultured in
Diferent Nutrient Enriched and Infuence to Bawal Fish
• Saran/Masukkan
• “Indonesia is a rich country in natural resources. Azolla is one
inside” give the fact!
• How about: “Indonesia has a diversity of natural resources. One of
them is Azolla (Heru, 2014).”
• There are many ”missing” connection within sentences or paragraph
• Problem(s) is/are NOT clearly stated.
Review Intro-12:
Darna Susantie (Prodi: Biologi Ikan)
• Judul:
• Some Aspect Biology Eel in Sangihe Island
• Saran/Masukkan
•
•
•
•
Typo
Improve your English structure!
Why EEL? Why should it be conducted in Sangihe Island?
You stated, “In Sangihe island not yet research about specifc species in
Sangihe island.
• “Sangihe has a specifc species of eel but there is no researcher investigating it.”
• Q: What is the diference of Sangihe island? Find the uniqueness of Sangihe’s eel!
• Time schedule is not necessary to state on Introduction. You may state it on
Time Frame section.
Review Intro-13:
Agneta Lalombo (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• (Studies on) Teacher Perlocutionary Act and Persuasive Communication at
Classroom
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo
• The use of pronoun:
• Avoid the use of pronouns in an academic writing: I, we
• Use appropriate pronouns: The authors, The researchers, They
• Problem(s) is/are not clearly stated, including the limitation
• The example (e.g. “conversation”) should not be put too many on
Introduction. Preferable: some results/solutions and methods of prior research
Talent Scouting untuk PTN Baru dan Universitas di Wilayah
Indonesia Timur
Politeknik Negeri Nusa Utara
Tahuna, Sangihe, Sulawesi Utara
10-12 Oktober 2016
Review Intro-1:
Frets J. Rieuwpassa (Prodi: Pengolahan hasil
perikanan)
• Judul:
• Karakterisasi Sifat Fungsional Bioaktif-Peptida dari Teripang Hasil Ekstraksi Menggunakan Teknologi
Membran Ultrafltrasi (Characteristic of Functional Properties of Bioactif-Peptide From Sea Cucumber
Extration Using Membran Ultrafltration Technology)
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo
• Hindari penggunaan istilah yang sama berulang-ulang. Kita dapat menggunakan istilah lain atau
kata pengganti yang maknanya mirip
• Sumber referensi terlalu “tua”: 1993, 1996, 2002, 2003. Gunakan referensi terkini yang relevan
sehingga peneliti terlihat memang mengikuti perkembangan penelitian bidang yang dikaji
• Kutipan: “Hasil penelitian membuktikan bahwa …” sebaiknya menggunakan sumber referensinya,
misalkan “Heru (2013) membuktikan bahwa …”
• Problem yang akan dikaji:
• Penggunaan Membran Ultrafltrasi Q: Apakah ada pendekatan lain yang dapat Anda teliti sebagai novelty?
• Karakterisasi fungsional dari ekstraksi Bioaktif-Peptida Teripang Apakah belum ada yang meneliti hal ini?
Review Intro-2:
Usy Nora Manurung (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
• Judul:
• Pemberian Ekstrak Rumput Laut pada Ikan Nila Oreochromis Nilaticus untuk
Meningkatkan Resistensi Terhadap Bakteri Aeromonas hydrophila
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo
• Key terms: Rumput Laut, Ikan Nila, Resistensi/Imunologi, Bakteri Aeromonas hydrophila
• Why?
• What the advantages? What the efect(s) of the bacteria to Nila?
• Judul kurang “menjual” (tidak menarik)
• Ada “hilang” koneksi yang menyambungkan antara ”penyakit”, “rumput laut”, dan ikan
Nila
• Apakah yang tertulis merupakan ”Introduction”, bagian dari “Metodologi”, atau kajian
peneliti lain (tetapi tidak ada referensi)?
Review Intro-3:
Gracia Ch. Tooy (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• Determinan Kinerja Tenaga Kesehatan di Puskesmas Daerah Perbatasan dan
Kepulauan
• Saran/Masukkan
• Data: Tenaga Kesehatan di Puskesmas 1 dari 4 masalah yang ada
• Lokasi: Daerah Perbatasan dan Kepulauan di Indonesia?
• Q: Apakah di negara tujuan studi ada unit kesehatan yang setara atau seluruh
data diambil di Indonesia? Berapa lama?
• Dukung dengan riset yang telah dilakukan terkait fakta-fakta masalah yang ada
• Fakta: ”85 orang D3 = 63 orang, SPK = 22 orang” sebutkan sumbernya
• Masalah menjadi “rumit” dan “kompleks” why? How to measure it?
Review Intro-4:
Jaka. F. P. Palawe (Prodi: Teknologi Pengolahan Ikan)
• Judul:
• Eksplorasi Olisakarida dari Hasil Laut sebagai Senyawa Prebiotik
• Saran/Masukkan
• Key terms: Olisakarida, Senyawa Prebiotik
• Q: Why olisakarida? What is/are the advantage(s)?
• Hindari penggunaan kata yang sama secara berulang dan kalimat yang terlalu panjang
(kalimat terakhir pada paragraf 1)
• Perhatikan struktur kalimat khususnya dalam penggunaan kalimat majemuk
• Perlu dibahas lebih rinci hasil/solusi dari penelitian sebelumnya
• Belum terlihat masalah apa yang terjadi dalam penelitian dan solusi apa yang akan
ditawarkan (termasuk hipotesis Anda).
• Dalam tulisan hanya disampaikan manfaat prebiotik Oligosakarida, namun tidak
disampaikan apa yang Anda ingin teliti terkait “Eksplorasi”-nya?
Review Intro-5:
Stenly C. Takarendehang (Prodi: Teknologi
Informatika)
• Judul:
• Information Technology Infrastructure Security Standard in Rural Archipelago Territorial Area
• Saran/Masukkan
• Key terms: IT Infrastructure, Security, Rural Area
• Q: Why security aspect(s) in IT infrastructure so important? Why rural? Is it diferent from other
type of area?
• In statement: “Cost are cheap, No security standard, etc.” Need: Facts or prior research result(s)
• What kind of security standard should we be implemented? references: research or experience?
• Avoid this kind of sentence: “I already read research about security issues from Mr. X.”
• Avoid ego-centric pronoun
• Is the security awareness in government institution related to “rural area”?
• Why don’t you ofer such kind of “design, architecture, or protocol of security
mechanism/standard” instead of “just ofering a security standard”?
Review Intro-6:
Stendy B. Sakur (Prodi: Teknik Informatika)
• Judul:
• Acceleration classify data signal EEG using graphics processing unit (GPU)
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo and improve your ”English” writings, but it is good start you wrote it in English (:
Organize your sentence
• Key terms: EEG, GPU
• Q: Why we need acceleration? How to classify EEG? Why do you need GPU?
• You don’t need to write explicitly on the title, just write it in the body of your article as a tool
Intro, Scope, or Methodology
• EEG signal or signal EEG? What do you think? (-;
• You need to “state” solutions of prior research on similar topics. What problem would you want
to solve?
• What problem would you want to solve? EEG with statistical, numerical, GPU, or …? NOT
CLEAR
Review Intro-7:
Chatrina M. A. Bajak (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• Evaluation of Clinical Education Environment Related (to?) Learning
Experience: To develop more Efective Learning in Clinical Settings
• Saran/Masukkan
• Evaluation vs. Efective?
• Why CEERLE is so important?
• Note some prior research results on the introduction: problem
solution, limitation, methods, etc.
• Improve your “English” writing
Review Intro-8:
Edwin O. Langi (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
• Judul:
• Growth Analysis of Commercial Sea Cucumber Post Mutilation
• Saran/Masukkan
• Pair: “either … or …”; “neither … nor …”
• What problem do you want to solve?
• The idea is not clearly stated.
• What is the relation between: Commercial, Sea Cucumber, and (Post)
Mutilation
Review Intro-9:
Meistvin Welembuntu (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• Peer to Peer Mentoring Program
• Saran/Masukkan
• (Study, Design) on Peer to Peer Mentoring Program
• Use variation of terms or similar meaning of terms, not always use the
same.
• Hypothesis: one of solution is “peer mentoring program”
• 1-group (which is applying peer mentoring program) vs. control group
(which is applying traditional model)?
• Give your attention on Grammar and Structure
• How about your research theme? Qualitative vs. Quantitative Research?
Review Intro-10:
Stevy Imelda M. Wodi (Prodi: Mikrobiologi Pengolahan
Hasil Perikanan)
• Judul:
• Studies on The Structural Changes of Myoglobin and Identifcation of Bacteria
Produced Histamine in Big Eye Tuna (Thunnus obesus)
• Saran/Masukkan
• “Bigeye Tuna (plural?) are important fsh species …” How important is it?
• ”Mioglobin was water soluble protein that found in liquid muscle cell was changed to
brown” How many sentence(s)? 1, 2, 3, or more?
• How about:
• “Mioglobin is water soluble protein founded in liquid muscle cell. It was changed to brown”
• “Mioglobin, water soluble protein founded in liquid muscle cell, was changed to brown”
• “Mioglobin which is water soluble founded in liquid muscle cell was changed to brown”
• Improve your structure
• Give your attention to your (main) research problems?
Review Intro-11:
Desmianti Babo (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
• Judul:
• Nitrogen Fixation and Protein Formation by Azolla Cultured in
Diferent Nutrient Enriched and Infuence to Bawal Fish
• Saran/Masukkan
• “Indonesia is a rich country in natural resources. Azolla is one
inside” give the fact!
• How about: “Indonesia has a diversity of natural resources. One of
them is Azolla (Heru, 2014).”
• There are many ”missing” connection within sentences or paragraph
• Problem(s) is/are NOT clearly stated.
Review Intro-12:
Darna Susantie (Prodi: Biologi Ikan)
• Judul:
• Some Aspect Biology Eel in Sangihe Island
• Saran/Masukkan
•
•
•
•
Typo
Improve your English structure!
Why EEL? Why should it be conducted in Sangihe Island?
You stated, “In Sangihe island not yet research about specifc species in
Sangihe island.
• “Sangihe has a specifc species of eel but there is no researcher investigating it.”
• Q: What is the diference of Sangihe island? Find the uniqueness of Sangihe’s eel!
• Time schedule is not necessary to state on Introduction. You may state it on
Time Frame section.
Review Intro-13:
Agneta Lalombo (Prodi: Keperawatan)
• Judul:
• (Studies on) Teacher Perlocutionary Act and Persuasive Communication at
Classroom
• Saran/Masukkan
• Typo
• The use of pronoun:
• Avoid the use of pronouns in an academic writing: I, we
• Use appropriate pronouns: The authors, The researchers, They
• Problem(s) is/are not clearly stated, including the limitation
• The example (e.g. “conversation”) should not be put too many on
Introduction. Preferable: some results/solutions and methods of prior research