In this data, 5 of the respondents give score 2. They think that there is problem in the phrase
kamar terakhir bernuansa hitam
, it can be interpreted into two meanings, the first is a room painted with black color and the second is a
horror room. Also the words
tertegun
and
bisu
have a closed meaning. Based on KBBI
tertegun
means
terdiam
which means no sound or not do anything while
bisu
based on KBBI also has a meaning no sound. So, the word
bisu
in phrase
tertegun bisu
is better removed because the word
tertegun
already gives the meaning of
bisu
or silent. If
tertegun
and
bisu
appear in one phrase, the meaning is reversing. When someone
tertegun
of course heshe will not do anything even speaks, in this case heshe will silent.
2. Quite Readable
The average score of the data from 1.7 to 2.3 based on the Nababan‟s instrument is considered as quite readable. From nine quite readable data showed
that there were four data scored 1.7, three data scored 1.8, two data scored 1.9. Here is the chart of the quite readable data.
The discussion of quite readable data is explained in the following.
4 3
2 5
1,7 1,8
1,9 2
2,1 2,2
2,3 Quite Readable
Chart 2. Quite Readable Category
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Target Text Score
2. 2TTSM
Darah adalah simbol sekaligus segelnya,
merahnya yang menyala
, sekaligus
meneror 1.7
On the data 2TTSM there is a problem in understanding the text by the readers or respondents. The use suffix
–
nya
in words
segel
and
merah
is confusing. In the sentence, blood is a seal, but when the suffix
–
nya
is added in word
merah
it can be interpreted as a blood or a thing which is sealed.
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Target Text Score
15. 15TTSM
Dari situ terciptalah
beragam bentuk bayangan fantastis
.
1.7
The word
fantastis
in phrase
beragam bentuk bayangan fantastis
is not clear, if
fantastis
means unsual, the phrase would be better
beragam bentuk bayangan aneh
. The score of the data is 1.7 so the data is considered as quite readable.
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Target Text Score
18. 18TTSM
Ia
tidak mengacuhkan
popularitas gaya hidup yang diadopsi masyarakat umum
1.7
The phrase
tidak mengacuhkan
is not appropriate in the sentence. A phrase
tidak memedulikan
is more appropriate and clear to be understood by the readers or respondents. The word
mengacuhkan
which is derived from
acuh
is not a common word. People in their daily mostly used word
peduli
rather than
a cuh
. For example,
aku tidak peduli
and
aku tidak acuh
, people in their daily rarerly used the sentence
aku tidak acuh
they are commonly used
aku tidak peduli.
So, the phrase of
tidak memedulikan
is better and easy to be understood.
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Target Text Score
19. 19TTSM
Rencananya selalu mengandung
unsur keberanian serta amarah
, dan setiap desainnya
menunjukkan ha wa nafsu binatang meletup-letup
.
1.7
Six of respondents give score 2 on this data, they are confused with the meaning of phrase
ha wa nafsu binatang meletup-letup
, is the desire of animal which is very high or the animal itself which aggressive. The translation would be
better if
ha wa nafsu yang meletup-letup seperti seekor binatang. No
Code Target Text
Score
5. 5TTSM
Ketika setengah dari populasi
manusia di daerah kekuasaannya
menjadi korban wabah mematikan tersebut, ia
memanggil seribu teman yang bertubuh sehat serta berhati riang dari antara para
kesatria dan
putri kerajaan
. Dikelilingi oleh tubuh-tubuh sehat, ia akhirnya
beristirahat di dalam
gereja yang berbentuk seperti istana.
1.8
The phrase
manusia di daerah kekua saanya
is confusing, is the people or the area which has been owned. And also the phrase
gereja yang berbentuk seperti istana
has a meaning that it is a church which looks like a castle, but in the whole sentences, it is about princess and knights, it is not really related with a church. It
is better if the phrase become
istana yang berbentuk seperti gereja
.
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Target Text Score
8. 8TTSM
Mereka tidak membawa barang-barang lain yang bisa memicu sikap depresi
atau
kondisi mental lainnya
.
1.8
On this data, the phrase
kondisi mental lainnya
actually can be understood, but it sounds unfamiliar because
kondisi mental la innya
has many meanings such
as unconfident, paranoid, phobias and etc. It can more clear if it is replaced with one of those word.
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Target Text Score
24. 24TTSM
Kamar-kamar tersebut
kecuali kamar bernuansa hitam terkesan ramai padat,
dan ditengah semua itu
berdetaklah jantung kehidupan yang gemetar.
1.8
There is a word which is confusing on the data 24TTSM the word is
gemetar
in phrase
berdeta klah jantung kehidupan yang gemetar
, it is confusing because
jantung
can not shake
, berdetaklah jantung kehidupan
is already give the meaning. The word
gemetar
is not needed in this phrase or can be removed.
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Target Text Score
14. 14TTSM
Namun, didalam istana ini, bentuk kamar itu sungguh berbeda, sesuai
dengan kecintaan sang pangeran terhadap
apa-apa saja yang bersifat aneh.
1.9
The phrase
apa-apa saja
sounds unfamiliar. It is better if the phrase
apa-apa saja
replaced by
segala sesuatu
, so the reader can understand the meaning of the text easily.
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Target Text Score
21. 21TTSM
Maka para peserta pun
mengaplikasikan efek ini-itu
untuk menjadi bintang tamu paling unik di sana, sementara mereka
saling menatap satu sama lain, dari ujung kepala hingga kaki, kostum-
kostum antic bertebaran di mana-mana, memukau, kemilau, menghasilkan efek
ilusi seperti yang ditampilkan dalam pertunjukkan drama berjudul
Hernani. 1.9
The phrase
mengaplikasikan efek ini-itu
is not clear,
mengaplikasikan
is better replaced by
memberi
, and
ini-itu
is better replaced by
berbagai ma cam
. So the phrase becomes
member berbagai macam efek.
However, the data is considered as quite readable.
3. Not Readable