Does the writer support that idea with evidence? What is that evidence? Respondents Feedback

74 Respondents Feedback 42 Facebook should not be banned in Indonesia. 43 1. Today we are very difficult to find trees. 2. The first reason is the tree can help for reducing CO2. 3. The first reason is the tree can help for producing O2. 4. The first reason is the tree can help for saving water. 5. We must do tree planting. 44 Tree planting is very important because the trees are the place for animal to live. It has a lot of function and it can reduce global warming’s effects. 45 Unofficial marriage should be banned. 46 Why National Exam should be abolished. 47 She against to the government program. it is national Examination. She thinks that National Examination should be abolished. 48 About idle land should be planted. 49 National Examination should be abolished. 3. Does the writer support that idea with evidence? What is that evidence? Respondents Feedback 1 Yes, the writer supports the idea with evidence. The evidences are smoking causes cancer, heart attack, and impotent, affects pregnancy and the embryo, makes a person coughs and leads to bronchitis, and cigarette contains of some poison. 2 Yes. - Students got food achievements in the last 2 years of their studies but just because one subject they fail in exam, affecting their achievements. - There is cheating by getting the answers beforehand. - There is unhealthy competition. 3 - They study for years but this exam will determine the students’ grade. - Many students do cheating. 4 Yes. Many students don’t pass the exam. 5 Yes, he does. The evidences are: - Smoke causes a trouble with the blood circulation. - Smoke can lower the energy. - Smoke decreases oxygen for the brain. 6 No, doesn’t. 7 No, she does not. She does not give evidences in her composition. she only make explanation in her composition. 75 Respondents Feedback 8 Yes, the writer supports the idea with evidences. The first evidence is students are tired with their extra lessons. Next, government only focuses their decision in grading point on the cognitive aspect. The last evidence is about spending too much money in national exam. 9 No, she doesn’t. 10 Yes, she does. But in the second reason, in the last paragraph she said “It’s better if the money is used for other importance”. May be can be added by example important things. Her evidence about time, money and dishonesty. She supports the main idea with by other reasons in each importance. 11 Yes, it does. The writer explains her reason with some support sentence. 12 Yes, he does. The evidences are that idle lands are risky because it can make landslides. 13 Yes, he does. The evidences are: - Planting idle land will provide a new habitat for plants and animals. - The plants can reduce the emission of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere. - The plants can preserve the ground water. 14 Yes. the evidences are playing music makes the children more creative. Music is needed for children growth and make children cheerful and confident. 15 Yes. But the evidence is still common. I think it’ll be better if she gives more specific evidence and more evidence to proof her writing. 16 Yes, for example: “if the earth doesn’t have oxygen, the people in the world will die”. It’s absolute. 17 Yes, she does. The evidence is about material in national exam, government always increases the standard of national exam for high school students, and there are many students who fail in the national exam. 18 Yes, she does. First, the materials of the national exam isn’t in accordance with the material that the students learnt. Second, the government always increase the standard of national exam. Third, nearly 50 students in Indonesia failed the national exam. 19 Yes, the writer does. - They don’t have much time to study all materials. - Many students are not ready to do the national examination. - Many students get fail to pass the examination. 20 There is only few evidence so more research to proof your statement. 76 Respondents Feedback 21 No, because the writer doesn’t mention the evidences that support her fact. 22 Yes, he does. Firstly, cigarette contains much toxic. It can make someone addicted. Secondly, smoke makes our atmosphere become thin. Thirdly, smoking is wasteful. 23 Yes, he does. - National exam makes the students get stress and sometimes the material isn’t appropriate with the syllabus that teacher have been given. 24 Yes, she does. She shows about fact what will be if we smoke. 25 Yes, it does. First, planting trees are related to the fresh air. Second, trees can absorb water from our soil and trees can prevent flood. Third, trees can prevent landslides. 26 Yes, the evidence is from what that he feel in this earth. 27 Yes, he does. The source of the water depends on tree. 28 Yes, she does. The each reason has evidence which is supporting the main idea. 29 Yes. The evidence are written on each reason. 30 No, he doesn’t. He should add some evidences, maybe the bad impact of using FB for children like kidnapping. 31 Yes, the evidences are written on each reason that she wrote. - Tree planting is important to our air. Evidence: the plant changes the carbondioxide become the oxygen. The oxygen can make our air become fresh. - Tree planting is important to our water. Evidence: the root of the tree absorbs the water and keeps the water. 32 Yes, the writer supports that idea with evidence. The evidences are trees produce oxygen so we can feel so fresh; trees absorb rain water so it can’t be the cause of flood and trees need carbondoxide for photosynthesis. It can reduce carbondioxide which cause global warming. 33 Yes, it does. - FB has some cool features. - FB can connect government with their… - By using FB, we can meet our old friend. 34 Yes, but sometime the evidence isn’t complete. 35 Yes, she does. She support that idea with evidence in the real life, for example in paragraph 2, she gives the example of a problem in a polygamy marriage, it is taking the poverty away by forcing. 36 Yes, he gives examples. 37 Yes, she does. She gives example of uploading status to share feelings, about business development and facebook entertaining games. 77 Respondents Feedback 38 Yes. the tree can absorb air pollution, restrain flood, and tree is used to reforestation process. 39 - 40 Yes, she does. Some people have a willingness to do their marriage in an easy way. 41 No, the writer doesn’t support her idea with evidence. Because she doesn’t give specific explanation with her argument and she doesn’t give some examples. 42 Yes, the evidence is the explanation at the reasons. 43 Yes. par. 2. CO2 can be reduced by tree. 44 Yes. In the paragraph 4, the writer’s writing is based on survey. 45 The writer directly states the example in paragraph 2. 1. The proof is very important to arrange many letters. 2. The society never accepts a family who has unofficial marriage. 46 Yes, she does. She gives the idea which covers the whole reason. 47 Actually, she doesn’t support that idea with evidence completely. 48 Yes, it does. She shows four evidences. She mentions the advantages. She said that idle land should be planted because: First, it can make beautiful. Second, it will improve the florish land. Third, it can make oxygen improve. Fourth, it can reduce the global warming. 49 Yes. I think in second paragraph, the writer mention the reasons with carefully and there are example there. 4. What evidence is missing or incomplete? Respondents Feedback