B. Data Presentations and Discussions on the Results of 2
nd
Semesters Students’ Feedback to Their Peers’ Writing
The data were gathered from the first draft of the second semester students who were taking Paragraph Writing Class with their friends’ feedback on it based
on the writing feedback checklist which had been provided by the researcher. The data were gathered on May 2012 until June 2012. There were 75 participants who
filled out the instruments which had been distributed. The participants consisted of the students of Class A, Class C, and Class D. The researcher analyzed 35
which were chosen randomly from all of the participants.
1. Content
In this study, the researcher wanted to figure out how the second semester students gave feedbacks on the content to their friend’s writing. There were some
points provided by the researcher as the guideline when the participants gave feedback on the content of their friends’ writings.
a The Clarity of the Writing’s Purpose
The researcher wanted to figure out how the participants provided arguments about the clarity of the purpose of their friends’ writing. Based on the data, there
was a proofreader stated that the purpose of her peer’s writing was unclear. She said that the topic sentence of the writing was unclear so that the purpose of the
writing also became unclear
Example 1 The title of the w
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fresh air. The fresh a land….. Sample no.8
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clear. Second, the proofreaders could state the purpose of their friends’ writing and gave the appropriate arguments why the said that the purpose was clear.
Third, the proofreaders stated that the writing’s purpose was clear but they did not state what the writing’s purpose was.
Example 1 The title of the writing is My Nice Room
My room is a source of inspirations and looks very enjoyable. In the entry door, I stick some clouds that I cut from many papers….
The proofreader stated that the writing had a clear purpose shown by a clear topic sentence. However the proofreader did not state what the topic sentence of
this writing was and what the purpose of the writing was Example 2
The title of the writing is My Cozy Room My room is an interesting and cozy place to live. It’s almost two years I live
there. My room is in the second floor….
The proofreader of this writing underlined the topic sentence of the writing. He said that it had a clear purpose shown by a clear topic sentence. It told her
room which was interesting and cozy to her. Example 3
The title of the writing is My Bedroom
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