successfully. Here some examples of writing which the proofreaders gave some reasons why they stated it had good developing ideas.
Example 1, the writing entitled My Bedroom. The proofreader stated that the ideas of the writing were connected to each other so that the writer had been
developed the ideas well. It made the readers understood about the topic My bedroom is a tidy and comfortable place. My bedroom is huge enough
for me. When you enter my bedroom, you will find a table on the left side of the door. The lamp and the alarm clock are tidily arranged above the table.
Next to the table is the restful single bed. It is covered by a piece of flower sheet. A piece of soft blue blanket lies at the top of the bed. Opposite to the
bed, there is a wooden-made bookshelf. All of the books are arranged pretty good…. Sample no.6
Example 2, the writing entitled Gardu Pandang Gardu Pandang is the beautiful place that I have ever visited. It is located in
Kaliurang near Merapi Mountain. There are many plants along the winding road to go there; it makes the air cooler. So many people are really enjoying
the fresh atmosphere in that place. We can go there by “Kereta Kelinci” which is not too expensive. The design of the “Kereta Kelinci” is classic so
it is really interesting for the tourists who spend their holiday…. Sample no.12
The proofreader of this writing stated that the ideas of this writing were developed successfully because the writer explained every controlling idea
completely. She described Gardu Pandang very good and it made the readers wanted to go there.
2. Organization a. The Clarity of Topic Sentence
In this part, the researcher would like to find out how the participants gave some comments related to the topic sentence of the writing which they read.
Based on the data, there were three proofreaders who stated that the topic sentence of the writings which they read ware unclear. All of them gave some
reasons related to their statement. Example 1, the writing entitled My Cozy Room
This writing consisted of two paragraphs. According to the proofreader, the first paragraph of this writing had a clear topic sentence. However, the second
paragraph did not have a topic sentence
First paragraph: My room is an interesting and cozy place. It’s almost two
years I live there. My room is in the second floor…. Sample no.4
Second paragraph: Before entering the room, the first thing you will see is my name hanging on the door. Then you’ll find a rice cooker, TV, and a small
table….
Example 2, the writing entitled Bukit Kaba In a village named Sindang Jati, a rural path which wrinkles like a snake.
When we go along it, a wonderful hill named Bukit Kaba welcomes us with its fresh air. The fresh air is produced by shady trees which stand around
farmers lands…. Sample no.8
The proofreader said that this writing did not have a clear topic sentence. The topic sentence did not related to the hills’ descriptions
Example 3, the writing entitled My Lovely Bedroom. I want to tell you about the place that I really love the most. That is my
favorite place. I do anything and wasting my time at that place. The place is my bedroom. My room is the most comfortable place for me.
The proofreader said that the topic sentence was unclear because there were ineffective sentence. It looked like the writer write two topic sentences in
paragraph. The rest of the proofreaders or thirty two proofreaders stated that the
writings that they read had a clear topic sentence. However, both of them did not state what the topic sentence of the writing which they read was. For the example,
the writing entitled A Little Part of Japan, the proofreader of this writing said
that this writing had a clear topic sentence. However the proofreader did not mention what the topic sentence was. She just said that it would better if the
writer also gave her personal opinion. Another example is the writing entitled My Most Admirable Person
. The Proofreader did not state what the topic sentence of this writing was although she stated that it had a clear topic sentence. She just
said that this writing was about the writer’s best friend. Other thirty proofreaders who stated that writings that they read had a clear
topic sentence could mention what the topic sentence of the writing which they
read was. For the example, the writing entitled Beras Basa Beach. The
proofreader stated that this writing had a clear topic sentence which is My favorite place in my hometown is Beras Basa Beach.
Another example is the writing
entitled Mini Library. The proofreader of this writing said that the topic sentence of this writing was Mini Library is the coziest place in my grandparents’ house.
b. The Title Reflects the Writings’ Idea
In this part, the researcher would like to know the participants’ point of view related to the writings’ title, whether it has reflected and related to the ideas of the
writing or not. Based on the data, it revealed that all of the participants stated that the title of the writing has reflected the writing’s ideas.
3. Language Accuracy
There were two points which had to be considered in this part which were the ambiguous words and also the tenses.
a. The Ambiguous Words
In this part, the researcher wanted to find out whether the proofreaders who were the second semester students could give feedbacks on their peer’s writing
related to the diction which their peer used in their writing. Base on the data, there were four proofreaders who said that there were
some ambiguous words or sentence on the writing which they read. Example 1, the writing entitled My Nice Room
You will see that whole of my room is colored by green. The proofreader said that this sentence was ambiguous but she did not give
further explanations or revised the sentence became the correct one. Example 2, My Old Home
The next were my parents’ bedroom and my bedroom
. Both of them were quiet small.
The proofreader said that the sentence both of them were quiet small becomes ambiguous because the misspelled word which was quite gave different
meaning from the correct meaning which was intended. It should be both of them were quite small.
Example 3, the writing entitled Beras Basa Beach There are some nuts that covered by trees for the visitors to eat.
The proofreader said that this sentence was ambiguous but she did not give further explanations or revised the sentence became the correct one.
Example 4, the writing entitled Mini Library
Beside the usefulness of this room, it is also our place to share everything.
The proofreader stated that the correct sentence should be besides sthe usefulness
of this room, it is also our place to share everything. It because the correct
meaning on that sentence context was “moreover” not “next to”
b. Tenses
In this part, the researcher would like to find out how the proofreaders analyzed and gave comments on the tenses which their peers used on their
writing. The researcher also wanted to know the proofreaders ability in corrected the wrong tenses which their friends used on their writing.
Based on the data, there were eleven proofreaders who stated that there were some incorrect tenses which their peers used. All of them could correct those
incorrect tenses.
Criteria Respondents Title
Point to be Considered
Response Comments
Yes No
Language Use
1 My Nice
Room
Does the paragraph use
correct forms of the tenses?
It will brings a good impact….
It should be bring
2 My Old
Home The wall made
from wood and the roof made
from…. Passive voice, it
should be was made
3 Gardu
Pandang So many people
really enjoying ….
So many people really
enjoy….
4 My Most
Admirable Person
The listener is also enjoy her
playing. The listener
also enjoys her playing
5 My
Bedroom The bookshelf
made from …. The bookshelf
was made from….
6 Beras Basa
Beach It’s makes me
misses this beach so much.
It makes me miss this beach
so much.
Table 4.2 Tenses
