The Conclusion Organization a. The Clarity of the Introduction, Body, and Conclusion

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b. Vocabulary

In this part, the researcher wanted to find out how the participants gave feedbacks to their friend’s writing related to the vocabularies which were used on the essay. Twenty one proofreaders from thirty nine participants stated that there were some vocabularies on the essays which they corrected were incorrect in form and context. One of those twenty one proofreaders did not point which the vocabulary were less appropriate in the context of the sentence so that it could make the writer became confused in revising her essay. For the example the essay entitled Finding the benefits of taking a nap. The proofreader corrected two sentences containing some incorrect words in form. “Do you know if take a nap is beneficial for us?” Based on the proofreader, the word take a nap was incorrect in form. The correction given by the proofreader was “Do you if taking a nap is beneficial for us?”. The word take a nap on that sentence should be a noun not a verb, so it should be “taking a nap.” Another example from that essay was the sentence “ It can make our next activities is more better” . Based on the proofreader, she stated that the word “more better” was incorrect. It should be “ better” so the sentence should be “ It can make our next activities are better.” Another example is the essay entitled Against death Penalty in Indonesia . The proofreader corrected a sentence on this essay which was “One of the most important rule of those ten states is….” According to the proofreader the word “state”on that sentence was incorrect in form; it should be “statements”. A Based on the pro because an incorre needed by a lot of sentence should be sentence on the ess proofreader correc was “Every gende proofreader the w “opportunity”.

c. Passive Voi

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