Topic Sentence Organization a. The Clarity of the Introduction, Body, and Conclusion

also leaved the reader feeling satisfied. However they did not give any explanation or comment about that. Eleventh proofreaders from thirty nine participants stated that the essays which had been read by them wrapped up the writer’s idea and also leave the reader feeling satisfied. For the example the essays entitled, Breathe Healthy, Live happily, the proofreaders said that the conclusion of this essay wrapped up the writer’s idea and had good conclusion, “Keep in mind that smoking has harmful effects that can end up claiming life”. Another example is an essay entitled A Handkerchief can Help Saving the World, according the proofreader, this essay had an interesting conclusion which was “What are you waiting for? Change now and move now.” There were seven proofreaders from thirty nine participants who stated that the conclusion of the essays did not wrap up the writer’s idea and did not leave the reader feeling satisfied. One of those seven proofreaders did not give any explanation Six correctors from the seven proofreaders who stated that the conclusion of the essays were unclear, argued that the conclusion of the essay did not re state the thesis statement and it did not convince the readers. For the example the essay entitled Teenagers Listening Hip Hop, the proofreader argued that it should be better if the conclusion didn’t use question to convince the reader with final conclusion because if you do it, it would be less convincing. The proofreader also st clear and reliable a Another exam proofreader argued conclusion; she al reader.

3. Language Accur a. Tenses

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