The Appropriateness of the Presentation
not disturb the readers. The size of fonts also should be revised in order to make the readers easy to read the texts. The lines on the box also should be straight instead of
using dot lines. The expert also said that the use of pictures should be meaningful and has purposes instead of simply putting the pictures randomly.
In terms of language appropriateness, there are some terms that should be replaced, such as the words “meanings” that should be changed to “Indonesian
versions” and “language corner” to “grammar focus or language focus”. There are also some misspellings such
as in the word „color’.
3.The Revision of Unit 1
The revision of unit 1 is based on the suggestions by the expert. The feedbacks are used to develop appropriate materials in terms of the content, the presentation, the
language and the layout. The points to revise can be seen on the table below. Table 4.23 The Revision of Unit 1
Parts of the Unit
Points to Revise Revision
Cover The title of the developed
materials contains grammatical errors.
English Reading
Learning Material
for Computer
Engineering and
Networking Study Program at Vocational High School
The title should be “English Reading Learning Materials for
Computer Engineering
and Networking Study Program at
Vocational High Schools ”
Add the word supervisor on the front cover.
Supervisor: Jamilah, M.Pd. Title
The title should be correct in term of grammar
Change the title to: Well-performing
and Affordable Netbooks
Well-performed and
Affordable Netbooks Task 1
Replace the words “one words” to “one word”
Replace the words into the correct grammar.
You can choose more than one word to describe the
pictures.
Task 2 Replace the words “one
adjectives” to “one adjective” Replacing the words into the
correct grammar. You may choose more than
one adjective.
Task 3 Give a box to the text to make
it clear and make change the placement of the picture.
Give a box to the text and change the placement of the
picture.
Task 4 No revision
Task 5 No revision
Task 6 Replace the word “meanings”
to “Indonesian version” Replace with the correct words
Indonesian version Task 7
No revision Task 8
Replace the word “meanings” to “Indonesian version”
The instruction is not clear. Find the meaning of the words
that you already find on the box, and then categorize them.
Replace with the correct words Indonesian version
Change the instruction: Find the meaning of the words
that you find on the puzzle in task 7, and then categorize
them.
Task 9 Change the terms “language
corner” to “grammar focus” There is a misspelling and
incorrect use of articles Adjective isa word
It is part of speech Change
the terms “language corner” to “grammar focus”
Change the misspelling and correct the articles
An adjective is a word It is a part of speech
Task 10 No revision
Task 11 The source of the text should
be placed on the right corner Place the link source on the
right corner
The placement of the text have to be more clearer
Change the text’s placement The pictures is better to be
placed in the middle, not on the right side
Place the pictures in the middle
The instruction should be clearer.
Change the instruction and separate task 11 into two tasks.